Twinkling Black – A Hope

She cuts a star
out of the night
Finds no empty
in the sky

No white to
replace the void
No void to
replace the white

A twinkling black
in a jar of time
Finds a shelter
under the cobbled sky

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29 comments

  1. The hope feels conflicted. I love the way this flows, sounds…the imagery affects like watching children catch butterflies. It’s a happy thing, but sad for the ones that don’t make it out of the net the same.

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    1. Yes, thank you for the thoughtful comment my friend! It is indeed meant to depict a conflict as twinkling black remains something unseen and hope for some is in such abundance that its presence is concealed. I loved your interpretation – ‘It’s a happy thing, but sad for the ones that don’t make it out of the net the same.’
      Thank you for understanding! Have a nice week ahead. πŸ™‚

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  2. Oh..Oh.. regretting my late entry on this poetic island. Wondering, how I missed this Twinkling. Okay………wondering apart. Here goes my latest comment-
    HEAD : Cutting a star was an awesome feat (How did u do?). This is just incredible.
    TRUNK: The white to replace the void and contrariwise. Though this is a substance of sadness but the void was beautiful in your words.
    FEET: “Twinkling black in a jar of time”…………. beautifully captured thought. In love with this particular line so kissing the feet.

    Overall, a lucent star. Love it.

    P.S. Why a cobbled sky? My heart is ready to shelter such a lovely star.
    Stay shining darling! πŸ™‚

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    1. Oh my God! First off, LOVED the comment and I am happy that it was late..that made it even more interesting! ❀
      Head – umm…when you come back here, I'll tell you how to :')
      Trunk – Thanks!
      Feet – "In love with this particular line so kissing the feet." – in love with your lovely lovely compliment!

      Thanks so much! This HAS to be one of my favourite comment. So much love!
      Hehe, then this star goes to you! πŸ˜€
      You too! Stay shining, like always!

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      1. Thanks a million ……..you are happy and not disappointed. I am happy that you liked my comment. I am all laughing reading the reply.Thanks for the lovely shining STAR. Would treasure it. Too much love to you. Let us shine together. Keep smiling and shining. Love……….R! (the way you say) πŸ™‚

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  3. “It is indeed meant to depict a conflict as twinkling black remains something unseen and hope for some is in such abundance that its presence is concealed. ”

    Magical. I have no words, just gratitude. x. Meredith

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    1. Oh, thanks so much for going through the poem as well ad the comment, Meredith. I feel humbled by the compliment. It made my day a lot brighter! Your words will always stay with me as does the ones in the lovely poems you write.
      Hope you are doing good. Take care!

      -Light

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