No butterflies affect

ghibli3

rowing through rifts
between futile branches
flowers tinged in broken wind
compasses fled nests

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  1. First of all, i loved the way you played with the butterfly effect in the title and brought it to your own standards. Even though there are only four small lines, there’s depth in every one of them and in the way they interact with each other. I personally divided it in two parts, the first two verses consist of a team that clashes with the second part, the last two verses. But also it’s not necessarily a versus status between them, just an indifference on behalf of the second part towards the first one. And i will explain myself. The first part is the many people that are loud, like a mob and for whatever needless reasons they get into fights, useless quarrels (football teams for example) and all that. People i personally would never like to meet in the first place. The second part though, through all this mess there are indeed beautiful people you’d love to meet and spend time together and even the silence between them would possess some delightful meaning. These are the flowers that tinged in the broken wind, the nests of people that escaped the compass and fled into somewhere else better through their company. While at the same time, between futile branches, for all the meaningless reasons, the rest, the majority were rowing through rifts. And i loved the picture as well, the majority of blossoms in the branches, whereas the different whitey and orange flowers escape. In fact, the picture is really beautiful, but if you connect it to the poem, it paces really well, at least in the way i “saw” through your words. About the photo, maybe it’s beautiful as a whole, because beauty is not always the way it seems to be and it may be a mask, hence the many flowers of the branches seem beautiful, but beauty may be deceiving some times. I won’t say that i love your poems, no, OK, i do πŸ˜›

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    1. Ah, where do I start? xD Thank you! The title came to me from the curiosity that roots in the theory of butterfly effect. And, I love your interpretation or the idea of breaking it into two although I wrote it as one, now that you mention – it does seem like ‘versus’ can be used as an idea. Yes, indeed after segregating it into two the first part can refer to the needless hassle of our fast paced lives whereas the second part depicts the occasional lovely people one meets – the third sentence, as you said, very much mean the same. Your thoughts render similar feelings as mine while I wrote this. The prime focus being – “What has to, will be” which fits very well with your words and how you portrayed it, so very elegantly and beautifully. Thanks so much. πŸ™‚
      About the picture, it’s an artwork from the film The Tale of the Princess Kaguya, which has stunning artwork and animation. You must watch it if you haven’t. You sure did ‘see’ through my words, as efficiently as always! Hahaha, I am honoured by all the support and encouragement! I really am, for chincha! ^_^
      Also I read the spoiler-less review, and I must say that if there are no books for excellent drama reviews out there, then please, please, you MUST publish one! You’re a brilliantly ‘brilliant writer’, ah refreshing and so VERY creative! I’ll check out more reviews by you and leave some ‘thoughts’ on the ones I have watched. πŸ™‚

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      1. You’re welcome and thanks once again for the heartfelt and thoughtful beauty! Wooyah, i haven’t watched it, but the picture is beautiful enough alongside your thoughts that i should watch it, so i will proceed as soon as possible! Just keep writing and my satellite will keep on transmitting signals πŸ˜€
        Thanks a lot for your words on the spoiler-less thingie πŸ˜€ Wooee, i’m not that good as a review, for chincha >.< But thanks for your words πŸ˜€
        For some reason i connected this song with your poem! https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_pMX5uDR_B4

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      2. Hehehe, I will πŸ˜€ Woah, how do I make you believe? You’re an extremely talented writer! No kidding, one of the best reviewers and your thoughts come across so coherently – it’s a gift! I hope you create a writing blog as well, that’d be a delight. πŸ™‚
        Ah, Epik High O_O Thank you so very much! Tablo’s a genius, though my words fall no where near his perfection but it’s great you thought so. ❀

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      3. “How do i make you believe?” Hahaha that sounded as if you were trying to convert me to a new religion XD I could try to create one, but i don’t know if i will my translated to English writings :/
        Supreme T πŸ˜€ ^-^ You’re welcome Gomenne!

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      4. Well, I am, right? Considering how you don’t believe that I believe you’re a great writer. “How do i make you believe?” I shall ask this again XD
        Ah, yes about that! I’m sure there are other Greek bloggers here on WP. You already know how the blogging thing works so setting up a new one won’t hurt.
        Nao, I am not threatening you. Or am I? o_O
        When I have to read your work, I shall pester you into translating every last full stop, so..there. You can do it! Great, now I sound like Dora, the explorer. ^_^

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      5. Woohoo! That was funny thought:
        “On Saturday December 6, 2014 you surpassed your previous record of most follows in one day for your blog A Broken Flamenco. Nice!” XD
        You helped me surpass a record!!!! Yoshi Sugoi Gomen!

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  2. Beautiful poem! I saw you just liked the reblog of my (now) second draft of my first sonnet in my “Sonnets From Hush To Hush” series.

    The music video I posted in it, is a direct prequel to Woodkid’s sequel music video for “Run Kid Run”, which I’ve been thinking about posting with my 16th sonnet in the series, which I have been brainstorming ideas for throughout the day thus far, but have yet to actually begin.

    The reason I mention that, is because the music video “Run Kid Run”, I think also pairs nicely with your poem.

    I am easily influenced creatively, and in reading your poem in conjunction with looking to the music video above for some inspiration, I suppose I have already inadvertently started to draw some inspiration from your post, possibly something about cherry blossom trees.

    So though this comment may mostly have seemed to be “me, me, me”, the point I was building up to, was a thank you for an inspiring, creative poem and photo, and for likely cross-pollinating my ideas. My usual not-dead-poet muse hasn’t given me much to work with today, though my other dead-poet muse, Elizabeth Barrett Browning, may yet catalyze and galvanize some ideas.

    I think I will go look up some Japanese lore about Cherry Blossoms first though – thanks again, and for taking the time to read my sonnet!

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    1. Thank you so very much, Ryan! Yes, I read the re-blog of second draft of you first sonnet in β€œSonnets From Hush To Hush” series and really liked it a lot, I wonder where it will go further but I am sure it will be amazingly wonderful when it is finally done. I see the connection between Run boy Run and the poem I wrote especially the lines “Run boy run! This race is a prophecy Run boy run! And disappear in the trees” pace quite well indeed.
      Haha, oh no it’s most definitely not a ‘me,me,me’ comment, in fact thanks so much for sharing the song I love co-relating art as well, it serves refreshingly. You are very welcome, my friend, I am humbled and glad that you could find some inspiration from my work. I eagerly wait for more from Sonnets From Hush To Hush series. Elizabeth Barrett Browning, ah one of the finest poetess of all time. πŸ™‚
      Also, if you want to draw some Cherry Blossom lore from the Japanese culture you might like to watch ‘5 centimetres per second’. It is an anime movie by Makoto Shinkai and has some stunning artwork plus the story is rich in its own. I am quite sure you’ll like it. Thanks again, Ryan! πŸ™‚

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    1. Thank you very much, Staci! πŸ™‚ Ah, the ‘compasses fled nests’ line, about that, I found out that compasses means – ‘accomplished’ in archaic English so it relates to the line above it, as in broken flowers accomplish fled nests. πŸ™‚
      So, turns out ‘compass’ is a fascinating word or at least it was! Hahahaha ^_^

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